Okay. Page One attempt. I still don't know if I should keep going.
I would really REALLY appreciate comments on this one. I would like to know if others think this is a project worth pursuing or not.
Remember, no flames or comments about "how much this sucks" or anything like that.
I had a typo pointed out to me. While I'm happy to fix them, let's not nitpick on this. Especially if it's just one or two words that I accidentally mess up. Right now I just want to know if the drawings in each panel are good enough to keep readers engaged or if the flaws are too distracting. Thank you.